It probably was the right one, because I have two others I no longer use (one won't log in, other is one notifacation from permaban). And you're welcome! :P It's stories like yours that keep me willing to read, and people like you who inspire me to try writing :P

But about your stories, because I read the newer ones :P Fugitives wasn't exactly my tastes. I'm not certain what drives me to dislike it, but I'll reread it so I can fully explain my greivances. Broken Hope was flawless in my opinion. The depressing atmosphere for someone so emotionally unstable was unique and well executed. And the newset one is looking really good so far :P

It's probably that which made me not like it. I'll still take a second look so I can adequately describe my problems with it. And hey, different is always good. You appealed to that audience great, and even though I'm not entirely into the extremely depressive stuff (being one for love and glee), I still really liked it. Ah, that's why the new one seemed a little different from the others... :P

Again, you're welcome. I like critquing things and giving my opinion (ADHD and all ._.), so I try to give my most honest opinion, so that we can all improve and become better at what we are trying to do. I know not everyone appreciates my opinions, but the times when people appreciate them make me feel like the hate is worth me trying to help.

Ok :P Well I'll reread Fugitives in a bit (trying to find a Save Station in Metroid Prime :L), then I'll give a full critique explaining what I liked and disliked :P

Of course I am willing to help. :P

I think the best way for me to clarify is to give an example... "Months pass. I stay in the little cabin in the forest, with Adam, hiding from the enemy. He teaches me how to hunt, and how to survive in the most hostile of environments. Today started just like any other day. I caught a deer, and Adam made breakfast. <go to present moment>"

Yes, that. See, just a short paragraph or two gives a lot of information. Even the time can say a lot. Like a nervous or careful person would know the exact time, while those in a prison could only estimate. A tiny few words can add a lot to a story :P

You're welcome. Anything I can do to help you get your stories as good as possible. With how complicated your new one is supposed to be, you kinda need timejumps and stuff :P

Ah, okay. I assumed you considered it but I wanted to express my slight confusion. Although a confused reader is a curious reader, so you're doing good :P And that mutilated cerebus abomination thing... very unique :P

Well it was meant to be a compliment :P Today is passing quite slowly... don't you think? I feel like I should've gone to bed hours ago, but it's only the afternoon!

Well unique is typically derogatory, so... :P Perhaps, I woke up 7:30, but apparently it wasn't REALLY 7:30 and now my mind is completely confused... :L

I try to act like rude comments don't affect me (being a brony, having ADHD, and being a strange person in general leads to a lot of rude remarks), but I can never let go of their words... Sticks and stones will break your bones, but words destroy your will... How do you keep those words from getting to you?

Good method. I should really start writing again sometime... :L

Yeah, I understand that you're not a fan of my silly children's shows, and I can understand if you didn't scrutinize it to get a full opinion, as it's only the prologue... I'm just glad you took time out of your day to read it :P The future chapters are a work in progress, and are heavily inspired by your works.

:P You don't judge me, so I won't judge you. A person is not what they like and don't like, but how they behave around people with different preferences, opinions, and beliefs :P You can if you want, I'm not gonna stop ya. But I feel you just reading my work in the first place is already more than I ever expected :P

No, but I didn't expect you to care that much to go out of your way to find my profile and read my posts :P You seem like a nice person. Never had the impression you were cruel. A little dark, maybe some emo traits, but not cruel.

Same here. Sometimes, when I get really bored, I'll even look at the people who Yeah'ed my stuff. Not too many people, a lot being the same nice chaps, but sometimes I stumble on some really great new people.

You and Bree† are the only people I really ever talk to. :L I need to make more friends, because it's really lonely when one or both of you two are offline. :L Problem is I usually come off as condescending or brash :L

Problem is I find myself almost completely unable to initiate conversation. To most people's surprise, I'm extremely introverted. I share everything with my friends, but besides snarky comments, I won't say a word to those who don't talk to me first :L Hard to make friends, but I'm quite attached to the ones I have :P

... But who do I say hi to? I always get really nervous, because if they don't like me...

Hey, I don't dislike dark people :P And sure :P

One at a time don't overwhelm me :P

Thank you kind sailor :P Him and I will team together and conquer the world! ... If he shows up, that is :P

Introductions to the "Take Over Ze Vorld Meeting" xP Well that's crummy :L

Well my ancestors were German... :P

That's neat, never met a Scot :P Javier disappeared into thin air whilst I was eathing pumpkin pie .-.

Seems like a very nice guy. A little odd, and I think he's introverted, becwuse he is worse at introductions than I am :P

Well, I'm not going to say no to a chat. :P How nice of you to drop by!

First for what? I've been quite decent. Trying a few ideas for my first chapter, but I'm not certain what exactly I'm looking for. I'm also getting back into competitive Pokémon battling, but it's much less fun on the sims instead of the real game.

Not much, just a ideas floating in my head. All that is certain is the dreams/nightmares are going to play a very important part. And yeah, there are a lot of ways to battle. My X is broken, so I'm forced to use simulators instead of the real thing. Annoying, but I'll never stop my Pokémon shtuf, it's one of the few things I have fun doing.

Well, I have a few ideas of how the dreams would work. Thanks to RPs with Bree, I have a character with a very cautious, nervous, and self questioning personality. Perfect for psychological games. I can't wait to see how my crazed, ADHD, potentially autistic mind plays it out. It's the game :L Pokemon X. Broke it in July and I still don't have the money for a new game.

Well I might get it up today. Narrowing down my ideas, and a few are looking particularly interesting. Not sure how'd they'd look on paper, however...

That's why it is taking so long. I write a draft before posting anything, and I'll redo it if I don't like it. That prologue is literally my FIFTH draft. Whenever I write as I go, it always flops and I get stuck... :L

Well whenever I did an RP or something I always had some new idea. Would you have guessed the prologue used to be happy? Then it was memories of his youth, then it became what is, me brushing it up a little each time I rewrote it. I think I'll post the chapter later today, it only took two drafts (three drafts when I post it on Miiverse)

Yeah, I never would've thought of the somber tone if he hadn't nearly drowned in an RP. I had the idea of having an RP for flashbacks of his youth, but it has kinda turned into a fun way to get new ideas, and enjoy the joys of childhood. :P

Intriguing? I assumed it was normal for writers to get ideas by talking with others? Yeah, RPs are a great way to get inspiration for a story. You don't control every character, and you get to experience stuff you never would've thought of. Best part is you have to react, causing a good dunderstanding of your characters personality, allowing for a more complex character.

I'm not sure even my friends understand me. My mind hates each and every person, but I like the few despite my disliking of them. As I said, I get nervous meeting new people, because I'm pretty good at making them disappear (kinda how that guy you sent vanished :L). You should try one sometime. Do it with a good friend or two (although I prefer 1-on-1) for one of your ideas you haven't started.