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03/24/2017 3:30 AM ·Spoilers

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I attempt to write a story

I really wanna write a story so I thought ‘why not do it here?’ I'll develop it a post or two at a time. If you could all leave some criticism after I post that'd be great. I'll delete them before I update to make it neater. I'll leave about 4-5 days between updates. If you wanna keep updated just post a suggestion. I'll make my first update in 2 or 3 days -thanks

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  • [NEW UPDATE] It's sunday night. I'm making my way to my dad. A gust of winter air cuts through my jacket as I walk. Violently my teeth chatter. Inside my pockts my hands feel of ice. “cold?” I turn to where the voice came from to find Scott Pilgrim now walking on my left. Cheerfully he asks, “where are you off to?” “It's 10pm Scott. don't you have work tommorow?‚” I ask him.

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  • “Don't you have school?” I scoff and continue to walk quietly. my teeth start to chatter more violently and my lips develop a light blue tinge. “what are you doing out in cold Scar??” “Could ask you the same question” “Scarlett stop!” I don't know why but I listen to his command. He take off his jacket and offers it me “here.” I stare at it. No way am I accepting more help from him. (next post)

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  • Another cold gust rips through my clothes. Next thing I know I'm wearing 2 jackets. “If you get cold, don't expect to get this back.” I continue to walk.

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  • [Ok well that was the second part. Definetly not as dark as the last one. I've added Scott as a character. You'll see him more throughout the story. He'll fight the bf's soon don't worry. thats it. ok bye. hope you enjoyed. till next time]

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  • is that all your book? because it could be good!

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  • [NEW UPDATE] We continue to walk in silence. He bounces around to keep warm. “so,” he says, “where are you going?” “didn't you already try to ask me that?” “didn't you already try to ignore it?” after a moment of silence I say“if you must know, I'm going to visit someone” “someone I know?” I stop and turn to him. “Scott, what do you want?” His eyes turn into pools of genuine concern. [next post]

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  • “I want you to be safe, Scarlett” I soften my tone, “I am safe.” His voice gets stern “No you're not Scarlett. They could've damaged one your lungs.” I am so sick of this. Ever since the incident he's been babying me. “ugh. Scott look, I'm glad you're concerned for me i'm fine” I continue to explain capability to look after myself but he cuts me short. “didyou here that?!” [next post]

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  • He steps closer to me his eyes darting around. “Scott this isn't funny.” Getting a little nervous I also begin to search for any movement. Though the street is empty I feel they are many present. I'd hate to admit it but what happened 5 days ago really freaked me out, so when Scott grabs my wrist and tells me to run, I don't hesitate. But before we can take a step Tiger and his gang surround us.

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  • [there are so many mistakes in this update. Sorry about that. I hope you still liked it tho. Remember you can suggest characters or plots or whatever. Just, yknow, make it reasonable. ok bye.]

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  • my name jeff

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  • I can't tell if you're being ironic or not.

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  • I like this! Nah, I don't think it's too dark, I kinda like it that way. Mind if I comment for notifs?

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  • thank you pikachu. I'm glad you like it. go ahead and comment. I don't mind.

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