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05/23/2017 6:18 PM ·Spoilers

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Under the barn ( my story )

Chapter one “ Tag! You're it Steven! “ David happily said. Steven and David were playing tag in David’s barn. The barn had come with the house. David’s parents are a bit overprotective so at first they didn't let them in it. They didn't have anything to use it for. Steven loved the barn and now, it was where the two played tag and pretended to sword fight.

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  • samantha

    05/23/2017 6:19 PM ·Spoilers

    Steven loved playing with David. He was his best friend. Well, his only friend. They lived in the country and there weren't that many kids that were their age. Steven laughed. “ You’ll never get me! “ He yelled at David. The two children ran around and played until… David tagged Steven. “ Gotta! “ David shouted happily.

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  • samantha

    05/23/2017 6:20 PM ·Spoilers

    Suddenly, without warning, the floor collapsed under the twelve year- old Steven. He shouted in surprise. Steven landed in a pile of hay on the lower floor of the barn. David ran down the barn steps and worriedly asked, “ Are you ok, Steven? “ “ Yeah, I'm fine, “ He said. “ Wait, what's this? “ “ What is it? “ David asked. “ This….come here. “ Steven said.

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  • samantha

    05/23/2017 6:20 PM ·Spoilers

    “ This….come here. “ Steven said. David walked over to see what his friend was looking at. Then, he saw it. About nine square feet, on the floor of David’s barn, was a trapdoor. Some of the wood had worn away and had began to rot. The two couldn't see anything in the several holes. Just ...darkness. How…? I've never seen this before. How could it get here? “ He wondered.

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  • samantha

    05/23/2017 6:21 PM ·Spoilers

    Steven responded, “ I don't know. I don't live here. “ “ What do we do? “ David asked. Steven said, “ Again, I don't know. “ Without a word, Steven sat up and opened the trapdoor. He was curious. He had never seen something like this before. He may never again. So, why waste the chance? David said, “ No! We can't go in it! What if we get lost? “

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  • samantha

    05/23/2017 6:21 PM ·Spoilers

    “ We won't get lost we’ll stay together. It can't be very big. “ He reassured. “ O-ok…” David mumbled. Steven knew David didn't really want to do this. He always was really shy and nervous. Steven wouldn't leave David here. He didn't want him to miss this. Without a word, Steven started climbing down into the darkness with David soon following. The ladder was old.

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  • samantha

    05/23/2017 6:22 PM ·Spoilers

    It was simply made out of wood and rope. The wood was rotting and soon the ladder would be unusable. Luckily, the latter held as the two boys climbed down. They still couldn’t see the floor. All that they could see was the brown-ish rope and wood and the mysterious darkness below. Soon, they reached the end of the rope. “ Why’d you stop? “ David asked.

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  • samantha

    05/23/2017 6:22 PM ·Spoilers

    Steven replied, “ The ladder ends here. I’m going to have to jump down. It can’t be that far. “ “ No don’t! “ He warned. “ I don’t want you to get hurt.” “ I’ll be fine. “ He reassured. And with that, he let go of the ladder and dropped to the floor a few feet down. “ Are you ok Steven? “ David whined. Steven replied, “ Yeah, I’m ok. It’s only a couple of feet down. Jump. “

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  • samantha

    05/23/2017 6:23 PM ·Spoilers

    David jumped down and joined Steven on the hard, stone floor. Steven felt around. He felt something. A light switch. Without thinking, he turned it on. Sadly, the light was dim and they could only see a few feet ahead of them. The tunnel was dark and cold. The walls were made of rough rock. Suddenly, the two boys heard a quiet scratching sound. “ What was that? “ David questioned.

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  • samantha

    05/23/2017 6:23 PM ·Spoilers

    “ I don't know,” Steven admitted. The scratching suddenly got quicker, and soon disappeared. Steven sighed and said, “ It was probably just a mouse or something. “ “ Y-yeah, probably. “ David agreed, but his heart was still pounding. The two continued in the darkness, slowly walking deeper and deeper into the tunnels.

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  • samantha

    05/23/2017 6:24 PM ·Spoilers

    I'd love some feedback! Thanks!

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  • †Savannah†

    05/23/2017 6:29 PM ·Spoilers

    Pretty good so far! Perfect grammar and spelling, which I always appreciate.

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  • ης☆Pape

    05/23/2017 7:13 PM ·Spoilers

    This.....is......THE BEST! Good job! Good characters, Good spelling and wording!

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